แต่งเรื่อง Noi is small and thin จบเรื่อง

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Noi is small and thin. She was married. This is her rice porridge shop near the river. The shop opens every day in the morning. The regular customers are the children because they must eat breakfast before go to school. There are many fishes, the monitor lizards, the turtles and the birds in the rivulet. The parents like to bring their kids to eat here because the price is cheap. Therefore, there are many customers at that time. The children like to sit inside the shop and enjoy look at the fishes. There are many choices in the menu such as pork, shrimp, fish with or without rice porridge. Noi is kind. Anyone does not have money can eat for free or a half price.

My version, refer to the same idea as the original and changes.

Noi is a small and thin young woman. She was married but does not have any children. She owns a rice porridge shop near the river. The shop opens every day serving only breakfast. The regular customers are the families with children. The parents save their cooking time and stop here before school. The welcoming atmosphere makes everyone especially kids enjoy their meals. Besides, the cost is very much cheaper when compare to cooking at home. Therefore, there are many customers every day. There are many choices in the menu such as pork, shrimp, fish with or without rice porridge.

There are many fishes, the monitor lizards, the turtles and the birds in the rivulet. The children love to sit next to the windows and enjoy look at the fishes.  

Noi is kind. She offers free meals to everybody who does not have money once a week and also a half price once a month.