ฝึกแต่งเรื่อง Dum and friends

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My version reference from both original above: 

There is an old black male stray dog walking on the street in a small and busy town. It is pretty autumn in south Minnesota but no matter for "Dum" the stray dog and his fellow friends. A yellow cat "Sachi"  the same age as Dum is the genuine companion. He has a long tail and short ears. Apparently, he cannot hear well. They live inside an old building not far from the market. They make new friends with a blind raccoon and a white rabbit at a fruit stand. Also, a fatty groundhog comes along when they search for food under the tree in the park. The blind raccoon live in the big hole under the deadwood. He divides a part of his cavity to the tiny rabbit. In exchange, the rabbit gives him carrots and green veggies which he picks up from the vegetables plantation. Under the oldest church is the cosy pit where fatty lazy groundhog spend most of the time sleeping. He is not an energetic animal  but he goes out when hungry to search for food. It is a big benefit to him after joining the group because he only follows and waits to get his portion. However, he helps with carrying and dragging food when friends need extra hands without asking. 

As winter is coming, they must collect as many as food and fresh water enough then none leaves the warm houses to search for feeding the hungers. Everyone gets together and walks along the street. Each animal stops at the assign locations such as the market, the farm, the church and end at the train station. By the end of the day, they gather many edible items like big punches of bread, carrots and green vegetables, fried chicken, noodles and more. They help each other transport most consumable objects to their places and start the seeking again the next day. By the end of the autumn, they would get enough elements and that will be the time to rest and joy in their warm places through the cold weather.

Lucky news, they hear from the radio at the market that the district officers are going to build the zoo nearby the church. This is a chance for all of them to move out from the street and have a nicer place to live with plenty of food. Although, it is a long while not this winter.