ฝึกแต่งเรื่อง Bekery shop

attempt 1

attempt 2

my version reference from above;

One day in summer was a school holiday for Moon. She was sitting in the car with her family on the highway. They took a vacation and headed to the countryside where they would spending time for the whole week. Along their way, it was a big commercial sign displayed the famous "Farm Bakery"only 5 minutes away. The father  stopped in front of it and said to all members, "Hey, this shop is interesting and we should check inside".  Everyone did not hesitate and quickly stepped out of the car.  

The bakery shop was on the hill where could see a valley and scenic.  The small pond was in the front under the big tree. There were five ducks swimming in the clear water and the little two cats laid down on the tree root. There were few tables and chairs set outside for customers to admire the view.

Inside the bakery, there were people before us on the line  and an old man was interacting with the customers and smiling all the time.  Everyone pleased with his friendliness.  Also, he introduced himself to us as uncle Danny and guided us to the shop history exhibited in a small corner. It began after he got the piece of land after his father then he started to plan and built this homy kitchen style. However, he did not want to make it a restaurant but small and quick grab and go. There was a young woman in the pictures who was uncle Danny's daughter. She was the head baker and recipe creator but she did not at the shop on the day we stopped.  His wife was the main supporter and the only co-founder since the establishment of the bakery. We saw her at the ordering counter with a cute apron and a happy face.

Their daughter loved flowers and planted varies in the garden behind the shop. Amazingly, she invented the delicious flowers bakery which was their signature and being famous in the area.

We spent time in the bakery half an hour. The atmosphere was great and the bakery was fantastic. Also, the history behind was fascinating. The father mentioned that they would stopped again on their way back home.
 

ฝึกเขียนภาษาอังกฤษ selling ฝึกจินตนาการ

นักเรียน

attempt 1

My version reference from the original:

Nuch is a single mother who raises a 2 years old daughter at home. She would like to get more money for her daughter education. She has a small clothing store online. Her products are used good fashion outfits. There are many good condition donated clothing, shoes and bags from her neighbors and the women in the community. 

There is a weekend market nearby her place where she is going to reserve a stall. It is a big festival that would bring many people out of the city to participate. The neighbors are excited about this big event and cheer her up to make more money.

attempt 2

My version reference from the original:

Anna is being a small business owner selling crops from her parents's farm. She is only 17 years old and very energetic. She has a huge goal in her mind about her business future.

Anna was grew up in a middle class farmer family. They could not afford her to attend the college. Luckily, they had a piece of land on the hill where Anna started to do her thing. Her parents's farming was very successful. The vegetables and fruits always fresh and beautiful which on demand. Everyone was brainstorming and agreed to build the stall in front of the house and retail their crops. After harvested, three of them set up the shelves in the stall ready for a grand opening. There were numerous bins stored each kind of vegetables and fruits. The name sign " Your Garden" hung up and the arrow sign pointed to the merchandise displayed next to the road. A huge special price attached to the poles. The goods sold out in a half day. The customers were neighbors and people on the road passed by. 

On the next day, they got new products from the town because the customer requested. It was a great idea to add other crops beside what they had. They added more profit and save neighbors traveling time. None complained about higher cost than the market in town.

Anna used to think about working with a company in town. Since she has her own stall at home and earn money fast, she has never thought about working again.

attempt 3

 

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